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Sugar Rush
June 16, 2021|Short Story

Sugar Rush

Sugar Rush

Driving at full speed on an empty road. Gabin could only think about getting back on time. A state audit surprised him in the middle of the afternoon. The inspectors were ready to review the factory’s operations.

The inspectors were being entertained by some company employees, while Gabin pressed the accelerator of his car as soon as the light turned green. It had been five weeks since he finally, after so much effort, managed to qualify for the environmental standards. Unfortunately, the certificates were still inside a folder in a room of his family’s house.

This was the perfect opportunity to make use of something that he worked to get. But the certificates were still too far from him.

Traveling at full speed, he could imagine the inspectors walking around the facility and looking for a mistake.

Looking at the doors of his house garage gave him a much needed reassurance… he hurried out of the vehicle and ran home. He noticed that the place was unusually empty, but gave it little attention. Gabin rushed upstairs and entered a small living room on the second floor.

This was the first time that beauty dazzled Gabin. He immediately caught a glimpse of the beautiful figure of a stranger on top of the small table in the center of the room. His senses completely focused on her…Gabin didn’t notice but, for an instant, he could sense the fragrance of the stranger from the group of people present.

“What’s going on?” he asked with a smile, turning to get a better angle of her.

Gabin uselessly pretended that the girl wasn’t the only one present in the room. His eyes looked her up from head to toe, just for a moment before looking away from her.

“Do you think she looks cute?” said someone around him. Of course, at that moment, Gabin couldn’t recognize the person who was talking to him.

“We are preparing the dress for tonight,” said someone else.

Gabin looked at her again. She was dazzling, a beauty difficult to behold for long. Without realizing it, he began to breathe through his mouth and turned towards the group.

“What are you getting her ready for?” Gabin asked.

“You’re invited too,” the words came out like the sweetest melody Gabin has ever heard. The phrase was the closing line of a spell. He felt his body lightening, and his view narrowed.

Gabin looked up. The girl’s sweet red lips glowed. He slowly looked upward until he met the depth of her blue eyes.

The words stuck inside of Gabin’s throat; leaving him speechless. “You look… great,” he finally said, controlling his heart’s voice.

It needed to express all the beauty that he was admiring. However, Gabin lowered his gaze and tried to remember the reason for him getting home early.

“I wish you luck,” Gabin said, looking into her eyes again. Imagining the feeling of the soft skin on her face. “I’ll see you there.”

With that, Gabin left the room and tried to go back to what he was doing. Although, for some reason, it was very difficult to remember. The only thing he could focus his attention on was the beauty of the girl, and his plans began to revolve around seeing her again.

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Sebastian Iturralde

Fiction blogger—citizen of this beautiful planet, eternal lover of artistic creation and literature. Certain that the creative energy comes from nature.

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  • June 16, 2021 at 1:00 pm

    “The phrase was the closing line of a spell” Love it <3

  • June 16, 2021 at 1:53 pm

    Beautifully articulated. Thank you.

  • June 16, 2021 at 2:15 pm

    “You look… great,” he finally said, controlling his heart’s voice. Well done. Nice turn of phrase.

  • June 16, 2021 at 2:50 pm

    Beautiful pic. Makes me wonder we ever prepared for a surprise?

    • June 17, 2021 at 8:01 am

      Remember we are not just listening to stories we are inspiring our own minds. If you like the blog on this site, please like, comment and site

    • June 20, 2021 at 12:59 pm

      The best way to be prepared is to leave the fear behind.

  • Fungai Willard
    June 16, 2021 at 3:09 pm

    I love the way you build up suspense.It’s provocative. Well done!

    • June 20, 2021 at 1:01 pm

      I still wonder if he got the papers before he left the house.

  • June 16, 2021 at 5:42 pm

    Hmmm… to Gavin, the ‘words came out like the sweetest melody.’ So why do I get the feeling that the tone was not? I got an inclination that he’s in for a rude awakening. For this girl, if she is, is more than meets the eye…
    🇯🇲🏖️

    • June 20, 2021 at 1:02 pm

      Aren’t they all if you don’t know how to control yourself?

  • June 16, 2021 at 9:42 pm

    My beloved is to me the most fragrant apple tree – he stands above the sons of men

  • June 17, 2021 at 12:01 am

    Hmm! The girl that got Gabin speechless, who is she Seb?

    • June 20, 2021 at 1:04 pm

      She is the wizard’s assistant from a dream.

    • June 20, 2021 at 4:58 pm

      Little wonder Gabin was speeches at her sight, yet couldn’t do anything.🤐. Nice one .

  • June 17, 2021 at 12:40 am

    👍

  • June 17, 2021 at 1:13 am

    I remember, when one is under pressure, the mind can play mysterious games!

    • June 20, 2021 at 1:06 pm

      Youth is a dangerous ingredient in an explosive love formula.

  • Vashti singh
    June 17, 2021 at 3:49 am

    Can’t wait to read more👏👏

  • Samiah Arshad
    June 17, 2021 at 6:37 am

    I am glad that you are on your way to achieve your goal. Good luck and keep it up 👍🏼

    • June 17, 2021 at 8:02 am

      Remember we are not just listening to stories we are inspiring our own minds. If you like the blog on this site, please like, comment and site

    • June 20, 2021 at 1:08 pm

      I’ve discovered that writing is a journey and I’m here for the long haul.

  • June 17, 2021 at 7:22 am

    That kind of suspense is a killer. Very well written.

  • June 17, 2021 at 8:09 am

    Very true and life experiences make us never to take things for granted….. l guess.

  • June 17, 2021 at 11:59 am

    Dropped by to say thank you 🙂 You’ll know for what 🙂

  • June 17, 2021 at 12:42 pm

    My gosh you are prolific, and you work in such a huge range of genres. And, of course, love the art! 🙂

  • June 17, 2021 at 1:42 pm

    Loved it and want to read more

  • June 17, 2021 at 2:33 pm

    I like your basic intent, but the commercials or ads kept breaking up the story flow. Was the girl real or a portrait? It would be interesting if she were, but its not my story. I hope you continue so I can figure some things out without the interruptions. Very good.

    • June 21, 2021 at 4:57 pm

      I’ve sorted the issue with the appropriate parties. Let me know if it happens again.

  • June 17, 2021 at 8:13 pm

    💥💥💥💥💥💥💥💥

  • June 17, 2021 at 8:35 pm

    The first thing that came to my mind was the sirens on the sea and the poor sailors drown into her dangerous web. I think it was the her voice that cemented that idea in my mind. I am intensely interested to see what disaster she wreaks!

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