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Cheeky Gentleman
April 28, 2021|Short Story

Cheeky Gentleman

Cheeky Gentleman

As she left the bakery, Esmeralda noticed that she had forgotten her wallet on the counter. Right away she turned before it was too late to get it back. As she entered, she saw Joaquín for the first time—a stocky man in a dark suit. She instantly noticed the man’s aftershave shadow.

Joaquín had dark hair, green eyes, and to Esmeralda’s surprise, her wallet too.

“Excuse me,” Esmeralda said as she approached him, “apparently you found my wallet.”

“Is it yours?” Joaquín asked as he moved it close to her. “But how can I know you are not lying?”

“Do I look like a thief?” Esmeralda asked, a little annoyed.

“It’s better to be safe than sorry,” Joaquín said with a smile. “What do you think will be the first thing I find in this wallet?”

“You’re not going to search it,” Esmeralda said, futilely trying to grab it from his hand.

“Let me see what we have here.”

“Really…” she insisted. “Please don’t.”

“I see,” Joaquín said as he took out an identification card. “You’re ashamed of this photo. Aren’t you?”

“Well…” Esmeralda said, stepping away from Joaquín. “Now that you know it’s mine… May I have it back?”

“I think this deserves a reward.”

“You’re cheeky.”

“It’s the least you can do,” Joaquín said. “Imagine if someone else had this photo in their possession.”

“No, seriously…”

“Let me take you out,” Joaquín said. “I know a place nearby that has the best pastries. You could get a coffee, if you want, and with that the due will be settled.”

“Are you going around asking out every woman you come across?”

“This is actually very strange to me,” Joaquín said. “Since I saw you leaving this place I wished with all my heart to have a chance to meet you. It was a surprise to see you approaching me.”

“You are good…”

“Come on,” Joaquín said, “give me a chance and you’ll see, we’re going to have fun.”

“I have things to do…”

“Cheer up,” Joaquín said, taking a step towards her, “I assure you that you’ll enjoy your time with me.”

Esmeralda sighed, having him so close to her. She could see a glint in the man’s green eyes, and she crossed her arms taking a step back. “I don’t think it’s a good idea.”

“For me it was enough to hear your beautiful voice,” Joaquín said, handing over the wallet. “Getting to know the beauty you carry inside may be too much to ask out of life. In any case, I want you to know that it was a pleasure to talk with such a beautiful woman.”

Esmeralda took the wallet and raised her face to let her gaze meet him. “…okay,” she said. “But you better be a…”

Joaquín hugged Esmeralda around her waist and lifted her up with ease, instantly leaving her on the floor. “You have made me the happiest man.”

Esmeralda fell silent and felt the warmth of Joaquín’s hand underneath hers.

“It’s a date,” Joaquín said as he placed Esmeralda’s hand on his arm. “Let’s go then, my lady.”

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Sebastian Iturralde

Fiction blogger—citizen of this beautiful planet, eternal lover of artistic creation and literature. Certain that the creative energy comes from nature.

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  • May 7, 2021 at 11:14 pm

    That Is Such A Great Quote.

  • May 8, 2021 at 12:34 am

    Sebastian, that was an amazing story. Very emotional. Loved it.

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:10 pm

      Jessie, I’m happy to know you enjoyed it. I would love to have you read tomorrow’s story.

  • May 8, 2021 at 9:38 pm

    What a nice story! The gentleman was really walking the line, though! I was worried he would go too far with his teasing, but in the end, it was sweet.

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:37 pm

      Thanks Judy, he likes to push the boundaries… it worries me too. I’m happy you found it sweet.

  • May 9, 2021 at 3:48 am

    This is so profound, an eye opener for me, many times I try to run away from situations that risk my pride but you have to be brave to face your situations and not loose your sincerity in what you are doing.🙏🙂

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:38 pm

      It’s my pleasure…after all, we’re always receiving fear signals. Sometimes we have to risk it all.

    • May 12, 2021 at 1:02 am

      Indeed!

  • May 10, 2021 at 9:54 am

    Awsome page! Nice stories. 🙂

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:47 pm

      It’s my pleasure Victoria, please come anytime you want. Tomorrow we’ll have a brand new story.

  • May 13, 2021 at 12:20 pm

    Haha 😆
    I can only think of one thing, “There is no fear in love; but perfect love casts out fear, because fear involves torment. But he who fears has not been made perfect in love.” (I John‬ ‭4:18‬ ‭NKJV‬‬) 🙌

    • May 14, 2021 at 6:28 pm

      Just what I was thinking. Perfect, thanks for your comment, I hope to see you back soon.

    • May 18, 2021 at 3:05 am

      Wonderful! 😃

      Definitely, sir.
      Just hoping to find a better way of being notified when new stuff drop in.

    • May 18, 2021 at 10:44 am

      You could sign up to my mailing list and be notified for every new story: http://eepurl.com/gqYxPn

  • May 16, 2021 at 7:29 pm

    I have to say, as I am slightly jaded, that story terrified me! What was she thinking?? I mean I know he is kind-hearted, but only because you said so, she couldn’t know! But your story was most certainly engaging-good job!

    • May 16, 2021 at 7:52 pm

      One can never be sure what will happen in the next chapter. Thank you for your comment and I hope to see you soon for more short stories.

  • May 19, 2021 at 7:55 am

    What a wonderful wholesome story! We need more writers like you.

    • May 19, 2021 at 8:50 am

      I’m very happy to know that you enjoyed it, I hope that my next stories will also be to your liking. Come back soon.

    • May 19, 2021 at 8:52 am

      I am planning on visiting you quite a bit and I am sure you won’t let me down

  • Gina U
    May 20, 2021 at 7:51 am

    Flirting – I love this little story! So sad that flirting is a dying art – and one that can get many accused of sexual harassment these days.

    • May 21, 2021 at 10:55 am

      Hi Gina… you’re right, flirting shouldn’t disappear. Although, it’s becoming harder every day. I hope you’re enjoying my stories. I hope to see you back soon.

  • May 22, 2021 at 12:37 am

    Truth!

    • May 24, 2021 at 10:11 am

      Scottye, I see that you continue to enjoy my stories. What a joy!

  • May 22, 2021 at 1:33 pm

    Fun. Do men generally continue with efforts to persuade no matter how the woman is responding? I saw a couple do this (without the wallet part) in Acapulco a long time ago. Thank you for liking my blog post too.

    • May 24, 2021 at 10:35 am

      I’m happy that you liked Mary. I think it all depends on the man and the woman’s responses, for me it was very difficult to learn to differentiate between a no and a maybe.

    • May 29, 2021 at 9:55 am

      Very brave of you to share that comment, and much appreciated. Would you care to offer a sentence or two about your insights for a course I am working on?

  • May 22, 2021 at 9:56 pm

    And that is what I have chosen to do.

    • May 24, 2021 at 10:42 am

      The more power to you Ozy, but be gentle. The world needs more gentlemen.

    • May 28, 2021 at 7:49 pm

      Wow, you are right my brother. But many take gentlemen to be dummy

  • May 23, 2021 at 3:11 pm

    Nicely rendered! 👍🏾

  • May 23, 2021 at 7:55 pm

    Lovely write up.

  • May 24, 2021 at 11:04 am

    A beautiful story. Enjoyed reading it.

    • May 24, 2021 at 11:31 am

      Thanks Kritika, I’m happy to know you enjoyed it. I’ll try to create more like it.

    • May 24, 2021 at 12:45 pm

      Lovely it would be. Thank you for sharing these wonderful short stories. 🙂

  • May 25, 2021 at 2:09 am

    Thanks for the like much apreciated I shared your stories love them thanks Tom

    • May 29, 2021 at 9:25 am

      Tom, thanks for your support. I’m very happy to know that you are enjoying my work. I’ll continue creating weekly stories.

  • May 26, 2021 at 6:07 am

    I’ve regained my youth! Love is what makes us human. It brings back memories of my youth.

    • May 29, 2021 at 10:28 am

      J Clarence, I’m glad to hear that you got your youth back. Time takes the things we used to love away from us and I think fiction helps us remember. I hope you continue to enjoy my stories.

  • May 27, 2021 at 10:58 am

    Very well written and mesmerizing!!

    • May 29, 2021 at 2:29 pm

      Vabs, I’m glad to hear that you enjoyed it. Hope to see you back soon for my weekly stories.

  • May 30, 2021 at 7:17 pm

    I like that quote!

  • May 31, 2021 at 3:49 pm

    Good read.
    And thanks for liking my joke post on my blog.

    • June 2, 2021 at 12:12 pm

      Terryberry, it’s my pleasure. I hope you’re taking the entire tour of my fiction blog.

    • June 2, 2021 at 1:28 pm

      Thanks. I like what I have read.I will be sure to tour . t’s a pity with having my type of illness I find it difficult reading alot of things especially when one of my symptoms is getting ideas of reference(thinking all the time people are refering to me) . It’s why I find it difficult watching movies as well. I have written a bit about my illness on my blog. Thanks again.

    • June 2, 2021 at 1:48 pm

      Dear Terriberry, it isn’t an illness, it’s an opportunity (as Dr. Joe Dispenza says). Personally I believe it is a gift, like blogging (and like a t-shirt!). Be free.

    • June 4, 2021 at 12:37 pm

      In that case, I’m even happier to know that you read my story. I hope your days are full of light.

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