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Cheeky Gentleman
April 28, 2021|Short Story

Cheeky Gentleman

Cheeky Gentleman

As she left the bakery, Esmeralda noticed that she had forgotten her wallet on the counter. Right away she turned before it was too late to get it back. As she entered, she saw Joaquín for the first time—a stocky man in a dark suit. She instantly noticed the man’s aftershave shadow.

Joaquín had dark hair, green eyes, and to Esmeralda’s surprise, her wallet too.

“Excuse me,” Esmeralda said as she approached him, “apparently you found my wallet.”

“Is it yours?” Joaquín asked as he moved it close to her. “But how can I know you are not lying?”

“Do I look like a thief?” Esmeralda asked, a little annoyed.

“It’s better to be safe than sorry,” Joaquín said with a smile. “What do you think will be the first thing I find in this wallet?”

“You’re not going to search it,” Esmeralda said, futilely trying to grab it from his hand.

“Let me see what we have here.”

“Really…” she insisted. “Please don’t.”

“I see,” Joaquín said as he took out an identification card. “You’re ashamed of this photo. Aren’t you?”

“Well…” Esmeralda said, stepping away from Joaquín. “Now that you know it’s mine… May I have it back?”

“I think this deserves a reward.”

“You’re cheeky.”

“It’s the least you can do,” Joaquín said. “Imagine if someone else had this photo in their possession.”

“No, seriously…”

“Let me take you out,” Joaquín said. “I know a place nearby that has the best pastries. You could get a coffee, if you want, and with that the due will be settled.”

“Are you going around asking out every woman you come across?”

“This is actually very strange to me,” Joaquín said. “Since I saw you leaving this place I wished with all my heart to have a chance to meet you. It was a surprise to see you approaching me.”

“You are good…”

“Come on,” Joaquín said, “give me a chance and you’ll see, we’re going to have fun.”

“I have things to do…”

“Cheer up,” Joaquín said, taking a step towards her, “I assure you that you’ll enjoy your time with me.”

Esmeralda sighed, having him so close to her. She could see a glint in the man’s green eyes, and she crossed her arms taking a step back. “I don’t think it’s a good idea.”

“For me it was enough to hear your beautiful voice,” Joaquín said, handing over the wallet. “Getting to know the beauty you carry inside may be too much to ask out of life. In any case, I want you to know that it was a pleasure to talk with such a beautiful woman.”

Esmeralda took the wallet and raised her face to let her gaze meet him. “…okay,” she said. “But you better be a…”

Joaquín hugged Esmeralda around her waist and lifted her up with ease, instantly leaving her on the floor. “You have made me the happiest man.”

Esmeralda fell silent and felt the warmth of Joaquín’s hand underneath hers.

“It’s a date,” Joaquín said as he placed Esmeralda’s hand on his arm. “Let’s go then, my lady.”

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Sebastian Iturralde

Just a citizen of this beautiful planet, eternal lover of artistic creation and letters; with the certainty that the creative energy comes from nature.

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  • May 2, 2021 at 12:57 pm

    It is awesome and great

    • May 2, 2021 at 9:01 pm

      It’s good to know you enjoyed it. Come back next week for more short stories.

  • May 2, 2021 at 2:42 pm

    Boss

  • May 2, 2021 at 2:51 pm

    it can take a hell of a different twist

  • May 3, 2021 at 7:34 am

    Good

  • May 3, 2021 at 8:28 am

    Lovely piece of writing.

  • May 3, 2021 at 8:49 pm

    Whoa ! The man is good, lol.

  • May 4, 2021 at 12:19 pm

    That’s some good stuff there my friend. All the best and stay safe.

    • May 4, 2021 at 4:39 pm

      I’m glad you enjoyed it. I come up with more stories if you’d like to come back.

  • May 4, 2021 at 1:16 pm

    The images and writing together were really able to take me into another world, and that’s something I find lacking in things of today’s world; being able to tell a story. I miss the lack of images in books nowadays and seeing your blog made me feel like that fantasy-part in my soul is a bit more complete.
    Are the images your own Artwork? They really are a portal into another world.

    • May 5, 2021 at 10:38 am

      I agree, illustrators are important for a complete fantastic experience. Sadly they aren’t originally mine, although I tweak them to maintain the essence of the site.

  • May 4, 2021 at 4:33 pm

    😌😌 ☺️🥰 loved this! But I want more!!! Nice read!!

    • May 5, 2021 at 10:53 am

      I’m happy to know you enjoyed my story. Don’t worry, the internet has opened a door for me to share my stories with you, I’ll keep them coming. I hope to hear from you soon.

  • May 5, 2021 at 12:23 am

    Best .. worked for me exactly at the right 👍

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:01 am

      Thanks…lets just hope we can know more about their second date.

  • May 5, 2021 at 7:40 am

    so true!

  • May 5, 2021 at 8:08 am

    You’ve described the behavior of the men in my country perfectly! I pictured the whole scene 😀

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:28 am

      It’s good to know I’m not the only man picking up girls. I hope you enjoyed the scene.

  • May 5, 2021 at 9:15 am

    So engaging! This little scene really draws you in and makes you want to know more!

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:29 am

      I’m glad you liked it and i’ll try to make more romantic stories for you.

  • May 5, 2021 at 11:25 am

    Thanks for the translation. Maybe I can learn a bit of Spanish.

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:34 am

      If you enjoyed the story and learned something, that’s more than I expected. I feel a little proud.

  • May 5, 2021 at 12:24 pm

    Thanks for this read! I really enjoyed it! 🙂

  • May 5, 2021 at 12:40 pm

    First time I have seen this, but it won’t be the last. I enjoyed reading it.

  • May 5, 2021 at 1:52 pm

    Time well spent! Thank you for sharing your gift. 🙂

    • May 11, 2021 at 2:56 pm

      It’s good to know you enjoyed it. I hope my next story is of your liking too.

  • May 5, 2021 at 2:14 pm

    Your relato corto speaks to social consequences of the global pandemic..social distancing becomes social disconnection becomes social isolation becomes..you get the picture..where the universally beautiful, very human act of flirting becomes a potential vector for COVID-19 transmission..yet if we are to be fully human again, flirting has to be rekindled..there are few experiences that compare to crossing paths with a total stranger who makes your heart momentarily stop..what an exhilarating feeling!

    • May 11, 2021 at 2:59 pm

      Our nature will prevail and we’ll get out of this stronger than before. Thanks for your thoughts.

  • freespiritseedcompany
    May 6, 2021 at 10:32 pm

    I like it. Good job creating tension and suspense.

    • May 11, 2021 at 3:22 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it. Flirting has always been one of my passions.

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