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Cheeky Gentleman
April 28, 2021|Short Story

Cheeky Gentleman

Cheeky Gentleman

As she left the bakery, Esmeralda noticed that she had forgotten her wallet on the counter. Right away she turned before it was too late to get it back. As she entered, she saw Joaquín for the first time—a stocky man in a dark suit. She instantly noticed the man’s aftershave shadow.

Joaquín had dark hair, green eyes, and to Esmeralda’s surprise, her wallet too.

“Excuse me,” Esmeralda said as she approached him, “apparently you found my wallet.”

“Is it yours?” Joaquín asked as he moved it close to her. “But how can I know you are not lying?”

“Do I look like a thief?” Esmeralda asked, a little annoyed.

“It’s better to be safe than sorry,” Joaquín said with a smile. “What do you think will be the first thing I find in this wallet?”

“You’re not going to search it,” Esmeralda said, futilely trying to grab it from his hand.

“Let me see what we have here.”

“Really…” she insisted. “Please don’t.”

“I see,” Joaquín said as he took out an identification card. “You’re ashamed of this photo. Aren’t you?”

“Well…” Esmeralda said, stepping away from Joaquín. “Now that you know it’s mine… May I have it back?”

“I think this deserves a reward.”

“You’re cheeky.”

“It’s the least you can do,” Joaquín said. “Imagine if someone else had this photo in their possession.”

“No, seriously…”

“Let me take you out,” Joaquín said. “I know a place nearby that has the best pastries. You could get a coffee, if you want, and with that the due will be settled.”

“Are you going around asking out every woman you come across?”

“This is actually very strange to me,” Joaquín said. “Since I saw you leaving this place I wished with all my heart to have a chance to meet you. It was a surprise to see you approaching me.”

“You are good…”

“Come on,” Joaquín said, “give me a chance and you’ll see, we’re going to have fun.”

“I have things to do…”

“Cheer up,” Joaquín said, taking a step towards her, “I assure you that you’ll enjoy your time with me.”

Esmeralda sighed, having him so close to her. She could see a glint in the man’s green eyes, and she crossed her arms taking a step back. “I don’t think it’s a good idea.”

“For me it was enough to hear your beautiful voice,” Joaquín said, handing over the wallet. “Getting to know the beauty you carry inside may be too much to ask out of life. In any case, I want you to know that it was a pleasure to talk with such a beautiful woman.”

Esmeralda took the wallet and raised her face to let her gaze meet him. “…okay,” she said. “But you better be a…”

Joaquín hugged Esmeralda around her waist and lifted her up with ease, instantly leaving her on the floor. “You have made me the happiest man.”

Esmeralda fell silent and felt the warmth of Joaquín’s hand underneath hers.

“It’s a date,” Joaquín said as he placed Esmeralda’s hand on his arm. “Let’s go then, my lady.”

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Sebastian Iturralde

Just a citizen of this beautiful planet, eternal lover of artistic creation and letters; with the certainty that the creative energy comes from nature.

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  • April 28, 2021 at 2:52 pm

    Nice write up👏👏👏

  • April 28, 2021 at 2:59 pm

    Nice one

  • April 28, 2021 at 2:59 pm

    That is an unusual and very sweet story. I enjoyed reading it. I kept waiting for something terrible but was happy it didn’t come. Lovely. Hugs 🤗 Joni

    • April 29, 2021 at 10:00 am

      Thanks Joni. It’s not unusual for the girls I know.

    • April 29, 2021 at 12:40 pm

      How lovely. Everyone wants love, acceptance and to feel grounded by another earthy being who accepts them for whom they are. Probably now more than ever. Hugs Joni

  • April 28, 2021 at 4:16 pm

    A gentle banter of opportunity with just enough tension and release. A good flirt.

  • April 28, 2021 at 9:22 pm

    Nice story. Great read. But I wished it was more real and not like a Mills & Boon story…

    • April 29, 2021 at 10:03 am

      I’m glad you like the story, but it happens more often than you think.

  • April 28, 2021 at 9:39 pm

    So cute!!!! ☕️💕 I loved it!

  • April 28, 2021 at 10:53 pm

    This really speaks to me today. Thank you.

  • Dew
    April 29, 2021 at 2:01 am

    I like the suspension in this. great story.

    • April 29, 2021 at 10:06 am

      Flirting requires talent, thanks.

    • Dew
      April 29, 2021 at 10:56 pm

      ofcourse it requires great talent 🙂

  • April 29, 2021 at 6:45 am

    Beutifully honest x

  • April 29, 2021 at 8:34 am

    Tell Christa that I’ve posted my 11 inch she wanted to see it

  • April 29, 2021 at 8:42 am

    Can you please email me musiqjared@gmail.com kindly 🙏🏿

    • April 29, 2021 at 10:16 am

      If there’s something you’d like to talk about you can use my contact form.

  • April 29, 2021 at 8:52 am

    Finding the beauty inside is what life is about.

  • April 29, 2021 at 11:36 am

    I love its, by the way you write very nice, I’m new here In blogging post …. can you be my first followers please https://wp.me/pd1LD2-q

    • May 2, 2021 at 9:45 am

      It makes me happy to know you loved my story. I really appreciate you stopping by and inviting me to your blog.

  • April 29, 2021 at 12:34 pm

    Peculiar ping. Thanks.

  • April 29, 2021 at 7:09 pm

    🤗🤗🤗

  • April 30, 2021 at 4:59 am

    Very enjoyable, thanks for sharing and for visiting my blog too. Stay safe and well.

    • May 2, 2021 at 9:48 am

      It’s my pleasure sharing stories my reader would enjoy. Thank you for stopping by and I hope to see you back soon.

    • May 3, 2021 at 3:45 am

      Most welcome.

  • April 30, 2021 at 2:43 pm

    Well said👏👏

  • April 30, 2021 at 2:47 pm

    Nice !!🔥🔥

    • May 2, 2021 at 9:51 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it. I hope to see you back for my future stories.

  • May 1, 2021 at 6:25 pm

    Wonderful

    • May 2, 2021 at 9:52 am

      It’s good to know you enjoyed it. I’ll try to come up with more stories like it.

  • May 2, 2021 at 12:53 am

    Esmeralda made a choice would like to hear more Thanks for the comment on Taboo

    • May 2, 2021 at 9:53 am

      It takes two to tango. Let’s see what happens in a future story.

  • May 2, 2021 at 12:57 pm

    It is awesome and great

    • May 2, 2021 at 9:01 pm

      It’s good to know you enjoyed it. Come back next week for more short stories.

  • May 2, 2021 at 2:42 pm

    Boss

  • May 2, 2021 at 2:51 pm

    it can take a hell of a different twist

  • May 3, 2021 at 7:34 am

    Good

  • May 3, 2021 at 8:28 am

    Lovely piece of writing.

  • May 3, 2021 at 8:49 pm

    Whoa ! The man is good, lol.

  • May 4, 2021 at 12:19 pm

    That’s some good stuff there my friend. All the best and stay safe.

    • May 4, 2021 at 4:39 pm

      I’m glad you enjoyed it. I come up with more stories if you’d like to come back.

  • May 4, 2021 at 1:16 pm

    The images and writing together were really able to take me into another world, and that’s something I find lacking in things of today’s world; being able to tell a story. I miss the lack of images in books nowadays and seeing your blog made me feel like that fantasy-part in my soul is a bit more complete.
    Are the images your own Artwork? They really are a portal into another world.

    • May 5, 2021 at 10:38 am

      I agree, illustrators are important for a complete fantastic experience. Sadly they aren’t originally mine, although I tweak them to maintain the essence of the site.

  • May 4, 2021 at 4:33 pm

    😌😌 ☺️🥰 loved this! But I want more!!! Nice read!!

    • May 5, 2021 at 10:53 am

      I’m happy to know you enjoyed my story. Don’t worry, the internet has opened a door for me to share my stories with you, I’ll keep them coming. I hope to hear from you soon.

  • May 5, 2021 at 12:23 am

    Best .. worked for me exactly at the right 👍

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:01 am

      Thanks…lets just hope we can know more about their second date.

  • May 5, 2021 at 7:40 am

    so true!

  • May 5, 2021 at 8:08 am

    You’ve described the behavior of the men in my country perfectly! I pictured the whole scene 😀

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:28 am

      It’s good to know I’m not the only man picking up girls. I hope you enjoyed the scene.

  • May 5, 2021 at 9:15 am

    So engaging! This little scene really draws you in and makes you want to know more!

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:29 am

      I’m glad you liked it and i’ll try to make more romantic stories for you.

  • May 5, 2021 at 11:25 am

    Thanks for the translation. Maybe I can learn a bit of Spanish.

    • May 5, 2021 at 11:34 am

      If you enjoyed the story and learned something, that’s more than I expected. I feel a little proud.

  • May 5, 2021 at 12:24 pm

    Thanks for this read! I really enjoyed it! 🙂

  • May 5, 2021 at 12:40 pm

    First time I have seen this, but it won’t be the last. I enjoyed reading it.

  • May 5, 2021 at 1:52 pm

    Time well spent! Thank you for sharing your gift. 🙂

    • May 11, 2021 at 2:56 pm

      It’s good to know you enjoyed it. I hope my next story is of your liking too.

  • May 5, 2021 at 2:14 pm

    Your relato corto speaks to social consequences of the global pandemic..social distancing becomes social disconnection becomes social isolation becomes..you get the picture..where the universally beautiful, very human act of flirting becomes a potential vector for COVID-19 transmission..yet if we are to be fully human again, flirting has to be rekindled..there are few experiences that compare to crossing paths with a total stranger who makes your heart momentarily stop..what an exhilarating feeling!

    • May 11, 2021 at 2:59 pm

      Our nature will prevail and we’ll get out of this stronger than before. Thanks for your thoughts.

  • freespiritseedcompany
    May 6, 2021 at 10:32 pm

    I like it. Good job creating tension and suspense.

    • May 11, 2021 at 3:22 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it. Flirting has always been one of my passions.

  • May 7, 2021 at 10:55 am

    Easier said then done! Because of the many who DON’T do this who try to FORCE you to conform (be like them)…tis why its bravery!😊 Scary as *uck this ACTUALLY is, because of the tremendous amount of opposition…societal pressure

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:00 pm

      I agree…if it wasn’t scary it wouldn’t be so fun. Thanks for your thoughts, I hope to see you back soon.

  • May 7, 2021 at 11:14 pm

    That Is Such A Great Quote.

  • May 8, 2021 at 12:34 am

    Sebastian, that was an amazing story. Very emotional. Loved it.

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:10 pm

      Jessie, I’m happy to know you enjoyed it. I would love to have you read tomorrow’s story.

  • May 8, 2021 at 9:38 pm

    What a nice story! The gentleman was really walking the line, though! I was worried he would go too far with his teasing, but in the end, it was sweet.

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:37 pm

      Thanks Judy, he likes to push the boundaries… it worries me too. I’m happy you found it sweet.

  • May 9, 2021 at 3:48 am

    This is so profound, an eye opener for me, many times I try to run away from situations that risk my pride but you have to be brave to face your situations and not loose your sincerity in what you are doing.🙏🙂

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:38 pm

      It’s my pleasure…after all, we’re always receiving fear signals. Sometimes we have to risk it all.

    • May 12, 2021 at 1:02 am

      Indeed!

  • May 10, 2021 at 9:54 am

    Awsome page! Nice stories. 🙂

    • May 11, 2021 at 4:47 pm

      It’s my pleasure Victoria, please come anytime you want. Tomorrow we’ll have a brand new story.

  • May 13, 2021 at 12:20 pm

    Haha 😆
    I can only think of one thing, “There is no fear in love; but perfect love casts out fear, because fear involves torment. But he who fears has not been made perfect in love.” (I John‬ ‭4:18‬ ‭NKJV‬‬) 🙌

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    This short story has been carefully crafted with inspiration I got from the Andes' highlands.
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